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Pablo Báez's avatar

A lullaby in itself.

Incantatory as it thins and thickens towards the end, trickling into a dreamlike harmonious rhythmic haze.

I have my thoughts, but will have to wait until the end to see if my hunch matches.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much for that comment, Pablo, much appreciated. We hope to surprise the reader, which means surprising ourselves first!

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A. R. Eldridge's avatar

Beautiful and a little tragic.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much for that comment, hope you like the continuation!

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Nico Harlakenden's avatar

*Domestic surreality meets cultish horror meets emotional estrangement wrapped in literary kitsch. ❤️ Stepford wives v. Don't worry darling.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much Nico, stay tuned for the conclusion on Thursday.

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

I just spent 15 minutes singing karaoke. It's a good tune!

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

A read, a laugh, a tear, a song or two... what more could you wish for? Thanks Shony!

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Caroline Osella's avatar

This was evocative and beautifully built.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thank you so much Caro, it was built on a great understanding between us of the kind of thing we wanted to do. The details of the story were completely improvised though, so it was exciting to see what would come back and where we were going next.

I imagine this is the spirit of the original "exquisite corpses" Dadaist writing game.

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Jon T's avatar

great stuff guys --mwah

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks a lot Jon, so pleased you like it man!

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Jon T's avatar

original freshness - as usual

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EJ Trask's avatar

this is so tactile and sensory. I love all the descriptions of sound and color.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much Andrew, we're very happy you enjoy it so far!

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