I can see this episode play out perfectly in my head. With the exception of the quiet engine (no silent engines in the 50s/60s), this very well could have been one of those classic episodes. You nailed that classic TZ vibe. Well done, A.P.! 👏 Of course, I expected as much from you.
Thank you so much WP3, I'm very pleased you enjoyed it.
Do you really think the producers of the 50s-60s show would have allowed explicit references to stealing land and betraying agreements with Native Americans, scourging slaves with barbed cats-o-nine-tales, and overtime marital infidelity in the matrimonial bed?
If so, it was a lot more progressive than I imagined...
It wasn't a politically correct era by any means, and in some ways the 60s was more relaxed on certain subjects than we are today, but I do see your point. 😆
THIS WAS GREAT!! I love the use of language here to suggest the three are not so smart. I loved the plot twist of the cheating and what was in the box. 🤣🤣 very INNERESTING
You're welcome. Emerald will stay with me, but the descriptions of the bed posts and the scourge are burned into my consciousness now. Gross and gripping.
What a ride, and a great addition to the Substack Zone. I was caught off guard by the last few scenes, but it’s a great ending
Thanks very much Keith, happy you enjoyed it.
Absolutely love it.
Thanks Adriaan, appreciate the comment.
the end is so perfectly twilight zone
Thanks EJ, I imagine a snap zoom out from the empty box, a cut to the bleak expression, then a fade...
Lovely piece of writing. Great ending.
Thank you kindly Troy, happy you enjoyed it.
Loved this story. Such a bleak ending.
Thanks Shaina, I'm looking forward to getting into your story too!
Bravo!! Feels just right as a twilight zone story.
Thanks Nick I'm so glad you liked it
i was hooked the whole time, loved the twist at the end
Thanks so much Will, I'm very much chuffed that you liked it.
I can see this episode play out perfectly in my head. With the exception of the quiet engine (no silent engines in the 50s/60s), this very well could have been one of those classic episodes. You nailed that classic TZ vibe. Well done, A.P.! 👏 Of course, I expected as much from you.
Thank you so much WP3, I'm very pleased you enjoyed it.
Do you really think the producers of the 50s-60s show would have allowed explicit references to stealing land and betraying agreements with Native Americans, scourging slaves with barbed cats-o-nine-tales, and overtime marital infidelity in the matrimonial bed?
If so, it was a lot more progressive than I imagined...
It wasn't a politically correct era by any means, and in some ways the 60s was more relaxed on certain subjects than we are today, but I do see your point. 😆
Was really excited for this when I saw it was by A.P Murphy and was not disappointed.
Thanks Andy, your support and interest are so welcome.
THIS WAS GREAT!! I love the use of language here to suggest the three are not so smart. I loved the plot twist of the cheating and what was in the box. 🤣🤣 very INNERESTING
Thank you so much NJ I'm very happy you enjoyed it!
Great piece; really sucked me into the time and place.
Thank you Natalie for yoour kind comment.
Oh man, such great dialogue! And I was definitely not expecting that twist. So good!
Thank you kindly HG!
Like Bryan said, the dialogue in this piece really sings.
Thoroughly enjoyed this story, Murph.
Thank you Seany
Great dialogue throughout. It was really singing in the piece. Oh but poor poor Garrett...
Thanks so much Bryan - I wouldn't expend too much sympathy on Garret, Emmie tells me he was a POS.
Oh how you led me on throughout! Thank you. I enjoyed this piece.
Thank you so much Hanna, I really appreciate your comment!
You're welcome. Emerald will stay with me, but the descriptions of the bed posts and the scourge are burned into my consciousness now. Gross and gripping.
I do my best