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Hannah Hoare's avatar

I really enjoyed this story, particularly the character of Lucretia: β€œIt was a hideous thing to behold, Lucretia's empathy, a minor atrocity committed on the very concept of sincerity.” What a great line. And I love the twist the tale.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much Hannah I really appreciate your comment. The character of Lucretia is partly inspired by Ms deBauchery in the Boots Riley film Sorry to Bother You, a wonderful fake-empathetic boss.

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Bradley Vee's avatar

Great, great line.

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EJ Trask's avatar

there’s so much to love here but whoa that reference to the villages really solidified who these people are

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

But thinking about it a little, maybe not so much - it was her Auntie who was in the Villages.

What reveals who they are, IMO, is the thought that they never even invited Mannie to their wedding, just dropped him like an awkward part of their past.

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EJ Trask's avatar

I guess you can’t judge people by their aunties

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks for your comment EJ, I’m pleased you enjoyed it.

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Alexander J. Porter's avatar

Always nice to see someone survive their birthday/death day πŸ˜‰

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

It's nice when it happens which is why the cake should really come on the day after

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Bradley Vee's avatar

Loved this story, Murph! I was there in the booth behind Chrissie and Barry. The awkwardness was so palpable.

Lucretia was a great character.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks, if I didn't make your skin crawl at some point or other I wasn't doing it right

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Bradley Vee's avatar

My skin crawled because it was so relatable. I can't count the times I evaded long-lost familiars out of awkwardness. Chrissie did the right thing by coming clean. I guess it's a personality-type thing.

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Jon T's avatar

For whatever reason, it's the Squaklin' bit that puts this whole story 17 degrees off of center for me. From there it just zig zags to a 'somethings really not right here' place that's hard to pin down but every sentence leading up to wherever you are has been the oblivious patter of your disaster tour guide as the cruise ship is sinking.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Was trying to find the right mix of off-kilter, funny, near-horror and icky. Still working to get the balance right but when I get there I'm hoping for an experience like a Haneke or early Lanthimos movie.

Your janky music an interesting part of that mix

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Jon T's avatar

When they say Jerk I like to Jank

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Thanks so much Nadia! I very much appreciate your thoughts.

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